Audience Feedback
From our audience of 16-18 year olds our pitch generally had a negative reception. This however opened our eyes to the poorer/less planned areas of our piece, so from the comments we will look to improve.
Narrative:
Our narrative was unclear and lacking, to entice audiences we will need to explain in greater detail the plan, possibly with help from the storyboard.
Genre:
Although not specifically mentioned by our peers it seems dramas are less appealing to our sample/target audience, to counter this we may make a greater change to the plot of the two minutes so it is slightly more suspenseful and simpler so easier to explain.
Characters:
Although the use of red on the love interest was complemented, using black clothing to connote depression could be controversial in such a realistic film as it plays a negative stereotype of those with the mental illness, just because people are depressed doesn't mean they must wear black, instead the use of sound and acting will be used to denote this to the audience.
Overall we hope to re-do our pitch and our plot as we feel this plot is too ambitious and difficult to succeed in, we also now recognize it doesn't suit our target audience, particularly in such a generation which has huge exposure to action and tension with video games and such, those type of movies generally appeal more to them. One member of our peers suggested adding a comedic aspect which most of the audience seemed to like the idea of so this could be a good idea to incorporate. However we will still look to maintain the same plot and genre, however re-draw our storyboard and anamatic to incorporate our new ideas and more importantly make the plot much clearer for the audience to understand.
Simon Hall, the BBC's crime correspondent in the South West of England, came into our school recently. He talked to us about the trials and tribulations of journalism (an aspiring career of mine) and mentioned how his crew worked with him and his directors and camera men will travel around Devon/Cornwall and report on the top crime stories, he lately reported on the Exeter Cathedral fire and the flooding that cause the closure of the rail line through Devon and Cornwall. 